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3 Responses to “ The horrible weather!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ”

1. # 1   Adib Says:
   March 19th, 2008 at 6:09 am

   You told alot about the weather but you could tell more or put more than two sentences.

   You could also tell what you did on the bad weather.

2. # 2   Sameda Says:
   March 19th, 2008 at 6:10 am

   I liked when you said,This week our whole country has suffered under heavy rain and strong Easterly winds. But why did you write you should wrap up because in Canada we don’t need to be told to wrap up.

3. # 3   Eva Says:
   March 19th, 2008 at 6:19 am

   I really like your paragraph but it has some little mistakes. How you can improve it by adding what had happened to the people after the storm. The thing I liked about it is when you described what the storm looked like.Over all I think it was good.

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